Ravenous

by Ana Cristina

“Yes, it’s like that for me, too,” I said as I sat down next to her.

“Huh.”

“What?”

She sat up and turned her luminous gaze on me. “I keep wondering when I’m going to get hungry.”

It took everything in me to remain seated. I almost jumped out of my skin, hearing her say that.

“You’re not hungry? Are you sure?”

“Maybe I have to wait for the three days to be over?”

“No, Bella, it’s not like that. You should be hungry. Ravenous, in fact. It was like that for me, for Rosalie, for Emmett – even Carlisle couldn’t go without feeding for too long.”

“Edward, I swear I’m not hungry. I feel fine. Better than fine.”

It was true that the dark shadows under her eyes seemed to have lifted, but her eyes themselves were a brilliant red, no longer the warm brown they had been before the change.

“Not even for an irritable grizzly?”

She smiled at my poor attempt for a joke, then turned serious again. “I kept waiting for the thirst to overpower me, but it hasn’t. Maybe there’s something wrong with me.”

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Ravenous

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Neat back and forth to establish the concept you’re going for here. Hooray for dialog.

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    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Of course Bella isn’t ur average vampire. I agree the dialogue is wonderful. Woman! I really have to fight to remember that this is not part of the series. Thats how well it could fit in. You and ur wonderful writing skills :P

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    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Wow, great idea for Bella’s power, especially since everyone kept reminding her how hundry she’d be.

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    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Okay, it’s official (I’m going to have to stop reading your epilogue and start reading Twilight)... and then finish your series.

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    Posted about 1 month ago

    Maye she satisfied that hunger by eating a human in her confused state? :)

    That would make Twilight much more interesting! But I won’t ruin it for all the fans out there.

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