Back at the Houdini Bar

by Ana Cristina

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Old Bess looked up from the glass she’d been drying, surprise etched onto her weathered face as the bar door swung open to admit its newest patron.

“Well, blow me down. Karl, look who’s here!”

Karl raised his head, smacking his lips together noisily. His eyes lit up when he saw Becca standing there. Her normally tousled curls were now sleek and she wore a form-fitting green dress that left little to the imagination.

“Well, boss, I’m ready for my first lesson. Do you think you can show me how magicians saw ladies in half? I’ve always wanted to do that.” She pouted magnificently, her lower lip jutting out provocatively.

Karl straightened his tie and ran a hand through his hair. “I’ll need to get my props from home. Just wait for me here, lassie, and I’ll be back in two shakes of a lamb’s tail.” He wagged a finger at Old Bess. “Don’t let this here fishie out of your net, Old Bess. I’ll be coming back for her.”

Old Bess ran a practiced eye over Becca’s figure. “Oh, she’s not going anywhere, are you darlin’?”

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  1. Back at the Houdini Bar

    thebetweenspace's Buddy Icon thebetweenspace

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I love the way Old Bess talks, especially in her first line: “Well, blow me down. Karl, look who’s here!” If things go just right for Becca and Karl, I think The Houdini Bar might see a resurgence back to its glory days.

  2. Back at the Houdini Bar

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    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    You got sequel!

  3. Back at the Houdini Bar

    Krulltar's Buddy Icon Krulltar

    Posted 2 months ago

    I agree with TBS about Old Bess’ colloquial sayings. They make her character jump off the page.
    So why didn’t Karl invite Becca to his place to find his magic props? I can only assume he hadn’t had time to hide his box o’porn and/or the body of the body of the hooker he picked up last night after he left Becca’s apartment complex.

  4. Back at the Houdini Bar

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    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Krulltar, your comments are funnier and funnier each day!

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