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Entering The Unknown

by Writer4Life00nj

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Everything went black as the father and daughter sat there. It was truly the end of the generation. The young girl, opened her eyes to complete darkness. Nothing at all. She listened hard to hear nothing. Nothing except the sound of her own breathing.
“Daddy?” she whispered. No reply. No “Honey ,everything will be okay!” No daddy to reassure herself.
“Daddy?” she called, louder. Her heart was pounding. She kept calling for her father, each time louder and louder. Each time her heart started to beat faster. Nobody was there, except herself.
Suddenly, the young girl started to feel like she was falling. She felt as if the wind was whipping through her hair…everything was as if it were in slow motion. She felt as if she were falling off the monkey bars. But, her father’s warm arms were not there to catch her. The young girl kept falling. She wasn’t caught. She didn’t stop. Everything had faded and it was as if she were falling through a black whole. She was by herself. Entering the Unknown.

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Entering The Unknown

    Punkin's Buddy Icon Punkin

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    So, sad. Very well written. I really feel sorry for the girl.

  2. Entering The Unknown

    OrangeOreos' Buddy Icon OrangeOreos

    Posted 4 months ago

    Reminds me of when you’re lost in the supermarket as a kid and couldn’t find your parents.
    Same sort of lost, empty feeling.

    That was really well written.

    One mistake: I think you meant hole instead of whole in the last paragraph.

  3. Entering The Unknown

    Blusparrow's Buddy Icon Blusparrow

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I feel sorry for her too! Now she doesn’t have her daddy!
    LoA

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    invisibility_disability's Buddy Icon invisibility_disability

    Posted 4 months ago

    What happened to her dad??!?!!?

  5. Entering The Unknown

    Writer4Life00nj's Buddy Icon Writer4Life00nj

    Posted 4 months ago

    You’ll never find out! lol, jk

  6. Entering The Unknown

    Bartimaeus' Buddy Icon Bartimaeus

    Posted 4 months ago

    awww that’s so sad =( she needs someone there to hold her

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    Flute Loop<33's Buddy Icon Flute Loop<33

    Posted 4 months ago

    A little girl with no daddy is one of the saddest things in the world (at least in my opinion)

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    Mighty-Joe Young's Buddy Icon Mighty-Joe Young

    Posted 4 months ago

    did she die you are a cruel person writer i am like all sad now bring her dad back i mean it….just teasin 3.7 stars

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