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Sgt. Jason Coleman (Part 2)

“It’s O.K., son,” Tom said as he stood up and walked to Jason’s side. “Let me help you find your seat.”

“No, I’m sorry, I’ve got one more thing to say, Mr. Mitchell.” Jason walked back to the podium as the look of an infantry solider returned to his face. “That day – the day he died we were taking heavy fire and I didn’t think we’d make it out alive, but Pete… Pete kept his cool and maintained his military bearing. I didn’t even know where I was – I lost it. He told us that if we believed in him we’d make it out alive. And we did.” Jason walked over to the casket, dropped to one knee, and squeezed Mindy’s hand gently.

Billy and Tom were too grief-stricken to say anything. Billy sat and stared at Sgt. Coleman and Mindy holding hands until he was asked by the funeral director to help carry the coffin away with the rest of the pallbearers.

The image of the two figures holding hands was still in his mind as the funeral procession made its way into the cemetery.

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Sgt. Jason Coleman (Part 2)
BARomero
Posted 2 months ago

Continuing from my previous comment, this ficlet should start with Tom stood up and… Also there’s a slight name change in the first line. Is Coleman’s first name Jason or Jamaal? Billy’s reaction to Jason and Mindy is a bit foreboding. I want to see what happens there…
Sgt. Jason Coleman (Part 2)
YodaOnCrack
Posted 2 months ago

Yes, I can see where you’re coming from. It’s part of a short story I’ve already written called Lost Tears and it’s hard to break it up and place it on ficlets. Here’s a link to the entire thing, uninterrupted…
http://www.fanstory.com/displaystory.jsp?id=211797
Sgt. Jason Coleman (Part 2)
Blusparrow
Posted 2 months ago

It seemss like he waas a really good guy. I like this little series.
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Sgt. Jason Coleman (Part 2)
THX 0477
Posted 2 months ago

Well thought out scene there with the kneeling and hand holding.
Sgt. Jason Coleman (Part 2)
Krulltar
Posted 2 months ago

The entire story is quite good. The first ficlet in this series does a suburb job of setting it up, and provides a nice teaser intro for the story, but the these last 2 ficlet sequals don’t do it justice.
Sgt. Jason Coleman (Part 2)
Krulltar
Posted 2 months ago

The entire story is quite good. The first ficlet in this series does a suburb job of setting it up, and provides a nice teaser intro for the story, but the these last 2 ficlet sequals don’t do it justice.
Sgt. Jason Coleman (Part 2)
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Posted about 1 month ago

powerful