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Temporarily

by Laine the Grey

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Sigourney’s nose smelled something burning. You let some guy sleep on your couch and he burns down your… “Oh,” Her eyes widened in surprise.
“I was trying to make you breakfast,” Tasha said apologetically. “To repay you for fixing my head this morning, but when I went out to get the paper, I forgot about the muffins.”
Sigourney stared at the lumpy black mass. “I_ bandaged your head? That must have been a mistake.”
“Yes, well, you were half asleep.” Tasha smiled gently. “All is forgiven, Cold War Kid.”
“I have a name,” She said. “It’s Sigourney.”
Tasha smirked and turned back to the oven. _Sigourney. Sigourney. His mind kept repeating the name as if to commit it to memory. “I think I prefer the ‘Cold War Kid’, Sig.”
“I have a friend coming over later. So, if you have anything you need to do, do it then.”
“Is this friend male?” Tasha couldn’t help but ask. “And, would it be hard to explain the stranger living with you?”
“Temporarily,” Sigourney reminded him.
“Temporarily.” Tasha allowed.

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Comments

Average Reader Rating: 4.0 stars out of 5

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    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Where you italicize Sigourney’s thoughts, you should remove the quotation marks so as to distinguish them from the rest of the dialogue. Also, I don’t think you meant to italicize Tasha’s lines.
    Other than that, it’s great.

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    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Wait, I just realized, that it’s all part of the dialogue (it was a little confusing to follow). Did you mean just to italicize the “I” in Sigourney’s first spoken line? If not, that might work better.

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    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 4 months ago

    I’m with Ana on the italicizing muddle, but their interaction is cute, even if they have fallen into a comfortable style of banter rather quickly.

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    Wyatt Aapr's Buddy Icon Wyatt Aapr

    Posted 4 months ago

    2.0 out of 5 stars

    Disjointed and hard to follow.

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    Laine the Grey's Buddy Icon Laine the Grey

    Posted 4 months ago

    Yes, Ana, only the “I” was supposed to be italicized, but for whatever reason, it did some weird thing. Let’s blame Kevin.

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    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    LOL , when in doubt, blame Kevin, huh? Actually, he’s no longer at the controls of this site, so we can just blame the site itself.
    And I disagree with Wyatt Aapr – it’s much better than a two-star, sir!
    I hope you sequel this!

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    chakatreatmentson!(LoA)'s Buddy Icon chakatreatmentson!(LoA)

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    O.K. the italics suck,and i’m alittle confused as to tasha’s gender-but i find the cynicism implied by assuming the guy burnt down the house right off the bat- it’s absolutely real and human – love it and am reading the prequel now

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