One More, Then To Bed

by Bag of Sand

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He stumbled just a bit with the card, the price of four beers in two hours, but eventually found the security lock. The light clicked green and he whipped back around. She hadn’t moved a muscle.

All at once, it spilled from his lips, forcibly, almost against his will. He leaned toward her ear, and whispered, fast and close, expelling his mind into her ear.

“Vous êtes bel et si j’ai eu l’hasard pour toucher votre peau, je tout ferais dans mon pouvoir pour faire vous vous sentez que vous êtes beau.”

He backed away. She was sparkling.

“What did you say?”

“If I tell you, we’ll both be in a lot of trouble.”

“What did you say?”

“This is your last chance. Don’t ask again.”

She leaned forward so the space between them was inperceptable.

“What did you say?”

“To parahrase, I said you are incredibly beautiful, and if I had the chance to touch you, I would make you feel every bit of your beauty.”

She staggered and grinned.

“If you had the chance?”

The door shut hard behind them.

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. One More, Then To Bed

    Melia's Buddy Icon Melia

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Mon Dieu! That was hot. “Expelling his mind into her ear.” I like that line very much.

  2. One More, Then To Bed

    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 2 months ago

    Quite romantic.

  3. One More, Then To Bed

    Ana Cristina's Buddy Icon Ana Cristina

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Agreed, this was smoking hot. One tiny correction: in the French, it should read “belle” as he’s saying this to a woman.

  4. One More, Then To Bed

    Krulltar's Buddy Icon Krulltar

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Beautiful scene and wonderfully written. More than a good plot or story idea, it’s the writer’s little descriptive nuances that cause a story to stand out. IMHO , the use of the word “hard” in the last line was the perfect nuance to this amazing moment.

  5. One More, Then To Bed

    Krulltar's Buddy Icon Krulltar

    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Beautiful scene and wonderfully written. More than a good plot or story idea, it’s the writer’s little descriptive nuances that cause a story to stand out. IMHO , the use of the word “hard” in the last line was the perfect nuance to this amazing moment.

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