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Victory of the Succubus

by Poozzab

‘She sure seems nice.’

Jacek pleasantly thought. Once more through that frozen archway, but this time Jacek was not as bothered. Something about his female companion seemed to have lead him to stop caring for such things.
“Well, Hell is sorted into many different sections. Right now, because of your actions, we appear to be in one of the lighter sections of hell, though i must say…”
And she smiled. Though she had blood red hair, horns, and a wicked tail, there was not a menacing thing about her. Her words just trailed off, Jacek could hear none of it. He was caught in her aura. He wanted her. He would do anything for her. The Doctor was leading him to that room. Words echoed in Jacek’s memory.
“Trust No one”
Jacek’s stupid smile seemed to fade, and concentration set in. Follow her? They were at the doors now. Their eyes locked. A burning sensation pierced his soul. Something more painful than he had ever felt before. It pulled him, forced through to the room. “Your mine now. Welcome hell.”
damn.

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. Victory of the Succubus

    Poozzab's Buddy Icon Poozzab

    Posted 4 months ago

    What happened to the little text there? Can anyone tell me?

  2. Victory of the Succubus

    M.Paul Regret's Buddy Icon M.Paul Regret

    Posted 4 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    U need to tap the backspace key again.
    very scary story. kept me on edge of seat. well done.

  3. Victory of the Succubus

    RainDance's Buddy Icon RainDance

    Posted 4 months ago

    I sense doom. And I like it.

  4. Victory of the Succubus

    RainDance's Buddy Icon RainDance

    Posted 4 months ago

    Guess what? Since I failed going in the other direction I decided to try sequeling this one. See if you like it. I was trying to leave you the option of having Satan show up and talk to him when he’s all alone in the rain.
    :)

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