No More Lies

by Krulltar

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

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    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted about 1 month ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    This is kind of confusing. Mainly because of this line: “I would have been disowned if I didn’t marry your fucktard ass when I got pregnant?”
    She’s talking to her dad, whom she married, who ended up cheating on her?
    I like a lot of this, but the confusion really makes it difficult to follow. The last couple of lines though, are awesome.

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    Jamie Rose's Buddy Icon Jamie Rose

    Posted about 1 month ago

    I agree with John, this is quite confusing. In the first story, the guy talked about male modeling, and suddenly in this one the guy is a girl? Or do I have it wrong? But I did like the other lines that didn’t have to do with the whole pregnant thing; I could understand those a whole lot better : )

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    Krulltar's Buddy Icon Krulltar

    Posted about 1 month ago

    The narrator is talking to you (ie her husband). I changed “I would have been disowned if I didn’t marry ” to “he would have disowned me if I didn’t marry”. Hopefully that clears it up a bit.
    @ Jamie Rose…this is more of a continuation of a theme rather than a sequel.

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    John Perkins' Buddy Icon John Perkins

    Posted about 1 month ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Ok, that clears it up quite a bit. However, you should change that question mark to a period, as the sentence is a statement, not a question.

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    N555champ /\and/\ X-Ninja (LoA)'s Buddy Icon N555champ /\and/\ X-Ninja (LoA)

    Posted 28 days ago

    bullshit, child molesters go to hell--
    BEAUTIFUL !

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