Half Angel Pt. 1 of 2

by Poozzab

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  1. Half Angel Pt. 1 of 2

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    Posted 2 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    You could really feel the character’s fear and hysteria. Good job with teh description.
    The only little things I saw that could be fixed were that you used “seemed” twice in the second sentence and you used “new” instead of “knew.”
    But other than that, awesome.

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