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Counting Ribs

Whack! The ball bounced off the garage door with a satisfying thud as she took out her rage with the racket. The ball bounced towards her and was sent flying.

Just another 45 minutes and I’ll be good. I shouldn’t of slipped up like that before. Stupid!

“Hey! What’d that ball ever do to you?” came a voice from the end of the driveway.

“Huh? Oh, hey Mark. It’s nothing. Just burning some calories.”

“Should of known. What was it this time?”

“A cookie.”

“Umm…so?”

“A cookie has like 200 calories! That completely throws off my count!” She sighed in exasperation and continued hitting the ball.

“Not eating is NOT a diet plan. You need stop this, you look great.You weigh like 85 pounds.”

“87. And it’s still too much.”

“I can count your ribs. When I can count your ribs, that’s not a good sign.”

“Shut up Mark! You don’t know what you’re talking about!Why the hell is everyone making such a big deal of this? I’m fine!” she screamed as she picked up the racket and stormed inside.

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Counting Ribs
Armour Vivant
Posted about 1 year ago

interesting
i hate people who are think like that.
but this is good.
Counting Ribs
Frostbite
Posted about 1 year ago

Very nice. I’m 145 and skinny as anything being a guy haha. I like it.
Counting Ribs
Laine the Grey
Posted about 1 year ago

Great job. It examines the emotional part of anorexia…
Counting Ribs
Frostbite
Posted about 1 year ago

” I like it” meaning I like the story… just thought about it and its like I’m saying i like anorexia. Good job again.
Counting Ribs
French Toast
Posted about 1 year ago

Interesting spin on an really overdone perspective. Shows how intense eating disorders can become. Good job!
Counting Ribs
InZanadee
Posted about 1 year ago

Excellent job at showing not only the inside of her mind, but the converse reaction of someone on the outside, too. I liked that her friend was not jumpin in to save her, but still acknowledges there is an issue. Brilliant!