Hate me

by SunEyedGirl

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Cover up with makeup in the mirror
but you know you cant hide forever
did you wake up one morning and say
“I’m going to hate today”
why are you set to steal what I have?
don’t worry because you cant steal my joy
that is mine
how much did you pay for that smile?
yeah i bet you paid alot
but no ones buying it…

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Average Reader Rating: 4.5 stars out of 5

  1. Hate me

    YodaOnCrack's Buddy Icon YodaOnCrack

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Hmmm…. I find myself liking this for some reason. Why, I’m not sure… There’s a lot of emotion in this, but it’s not directed or coherent. In fact, there’s so much emotion in it that I don’t even understand it. Try taking one line – like “why are you set to steal what I have?” and making that a ficlet. What’s cool about this is that each line is a separate ficlet for the taking. Make it make sense and you’ve got a brilliant piece. Know what I’m sayin’?

  2. Hate me

    khepa's Buddy Icon khepa

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    agree with yoda. nice one.

  3. Hate me

    Frostbite's Buddy Icon Frostbite

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Quite good actually. I know there is some song influence in this, unintentional or otherwise haha. I like the last three lines the best :)

  4. Hate me

    Mystiquee's Buddy Icon Mystiquee

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Short, sweet, to the point; yet, leaves room for the reader to imagine and wonder- who, when & where?. It takes confidence to write something short because people have patience to pick at your work more. Bon!

    mystiquee

  5. Hate me

    MeAndTheMoon's Buddy Icon MeAndTheMoon

    Posted about 1 year ago

    I know exactly what this is supposed to mean, but that’s cuz i know you :)

  6. Hate me

    Note In a Broken Bottle's Buddy Icon Note In a Broken Bottle

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I love it!!! it is vague enough that many people can relate to it because they can give there own meaning to it but yet it is full of emotion. and I like the “cover up with makeup” line because i was thinking about writing something like that

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