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Sentience

The people in their sterile green and white froze. One man stopped in the doorway and turned, so that when the swinging doors closed they smacked him on the side of the face. Another, smaller gentleman who’d been attending to something in the corner made a sort of whimpering noise and fell to the floor.

Murmurs floated in from the hallway, disturbing the pinging silence of the room, ”...shouldn’t have achieved sentience.”

I repeated, as politely as I could, “What’s happening?” No hand stopped me as I rose to my elbows, though the room stayed slightly hazy, a morass of white stained with green and smatterings of red.

A woman, slight and graceful, made a step in my direction. An arm quickly swung up into her path. She made a sound of protest but said nothing. Rapid footfalls clattered in through the still undulating double doors.

A voice from behind me whispered over my head, “Does he remember?”

“Remember what?” I challenged, turning my head. A bolt of pain in my neck took away all sense, all light.

Comments

Sentience
g2 (la pianista irlandesa)
Posted 2 months ago

Yes, remember what? This is greatness… What happened, what’s going on to this poor person?
Beautifully captured, well done.
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Mistress Elsha Hawk
Posted 2 months ago

It seems they think he will be angry, attack, or retaliate in some way, and that coupled with the question if he remembers is a great cliffhanger!
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Wyatt Aapr
Posted 2 months ago

Great story, so far. Hope to read more of it.
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OrangeOreos
Posted 2 months ago

Woah. This is starting to give me a sinister vibe. For some reason, it reminds me of Grizabella the Glamour Cat from the musical Cats. They stop everyone from touching her or going near her, too…
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BARomero
Posted 2 months ago

Great story. The title suggests to me that you are either some form of AI (android? Frankenstein creature?) or else some sort of transgenic animal, which is a little Crichtonesque…
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Punkin
Posted 2 months ago

nice wordcraft!. i genuflict to your awesomeness. 10 stars
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Posted 2 months ago

i like this so far and it would be great to hear how this kid got here. Hmmmmmm…. it makes you think. *
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Posted 2 months ago

decided to sequel, hope you enjoy it.*
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Stovohobo
Posted 2 months ago

Oh, wow. Just the sprinkling of suggestive lines in here (not the PG-13 kind) makes it open to so many more possibilities. I love the reactions in the first paragraph, and the hints at who, or what he is, why he is there, etc. – of course, it also creates more questions along the same lines. This should be interesting to see where this goes.
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Ana Cristina
Posted 2 months ago

Spare, elegant writing juxtaposes nicely with the ominous scene you have going here.