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Crushed [Change This Story Contest]

by OrangeOreos

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I blundered into my room, throwing my empty bookbag on to my bed. I lay down next to it, and used it as the final resting place for my tears.

The final resting place… How peaceful those words sounded after what he had done…

I looked at the wall next to me where the photo booth pictures hung. Both of us making silly faces, laughing…

A sob heaved itself from my throat, and I tore the pictures down. At one time I thought all those smiles were real, but now I knew they had all been fake…

He tried to call, but I drowned out the ringing with my blaring metal. But he didn’t give up, so I threw it next to the pictures and ran out of the house.

The sledge my tool to torture, as it pounds down on your forehead.

I smashed his car to pieces. I smashed the bench on the bridge where we had kissed the first time.

Then I stood on the railing and put the gun to my head.

As my pained body smashed into the water, I pondered the note I had left him in his car.

Hope your heart is as crushed as mine. Bye…

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  1. Crushed [Change This Story Contest]

    Mistress Elsha Hawk's Buddy Icon Mistress Elsha Hawk

    Posted about 1 month ago

    you are so violent with this one! I got the feeling of despair more than anger out of it this time, awesome!
    my entry was not so much gore and death as yours and ALROs. :)

  2. Crushed [Change This Story Contest]

    Music-Hearted's Buddy Icon Music-Hearted

    Posted about 1 month ago

    Oh, wow. Chilling, I absolutely love it. I agree with Elsha… wraught with despair… Great job!

  3. Crushed [Change This Story Contest]

    ALRO613 ♪ LoA ♫'s Buddy Icon ALRO613 ♪ LoA ♫

    Posted about 1 month ago

    Again, another fantastic entry! Lots of anger and a great sense of loss..

  4. Crushed [Change This Story Contest]

    Blossom Ruoqen's Buddy Icon Blossom Ruoqen

    Posted about 1 month ago

    wait, so she smashes the car and the bench….. with the gun? then after shooting herself…. jumps off the bridge and… contemplates her note?? lol I kid, I kid. Nice take on this

  5. Crushed [Change This Story Contest]

    PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)'s Buddy Icon PyroPunk 51 (PPP LoA)

    Posted about 1 month ago

    hey, what car was it???

  6. Crushed [Change This Story Contest]

    OrangeOreos' Buddy Icon OrangeOreos

    Posted about 1 month ago

    I’d say at least a Corvette.

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