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The Mall

by Lizuka

They were a pair of friends… usually. Today, however, things were not quite so pleasant.

Though Billy and Nathan were together in their walk through the City Center Mall, they had not spoken to each other for at least ten minutes. It was a stupid dispute, they both knew full well, but pride kept them from patching things up. Besides that, they had been bickering a lot lately, and the friendship wasn’t exactly as healthy as it had once been – and it showed.

“Hey, Billy! Nathan!” The two of them stopped in place. They both knew full well who that voice was, and it wasn’t long before he was standing in front of them.

“Hi Jay,” answered Nathan, the tone of his voice still quite clearly bitter and his hands shoved into his pockets; inside one the blonde’s right hand fumbled with his money, at a loss for something else to do while in the opposite pocket his left hand did the same with lent.

But unfortunately, the subject wasn’t going to go unaddressed. “You two have been fighting again, haven’t you?”

Comments

  1. The Mall

    Wyatt Aapr's Buddy Icon Wyatt Aapr

    Posted about 1 month ago

    A little confusion here. Who’s the blonde fumbling with his money?

  2. The Mall

    Wyatt Aapr's Buddy Icon Wyatt Aapr

    Posted 29 days ago

    Ok, I understand it was Nathan. But without prior notice that he was blonde it’s still a little iffy. I think you could delete “inside one the blonde’s” and just make it “his” right hand etc. Good Luck.

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