Great dialogue! I love how he handles the situation without knowing exactly what the situation is…

I echo Mistress Elsha. Two favorite parts: “I hate when they say that, I thought, I never know what they want.”
and…
““And I suppose you expect me to just hand it over?â€? That was actually quite unlikely, since I had no idea which device they meant.

We had a lot of devices.”

Perfect train of thought! But the situation’s still foggy… maybe someone can clear it up in a sequel?

Awesome sequel! Everything is still shrouded in mystery and yet slightly clearer. The relationship of the internal monologue to the external dialogue is done masterfully. I echo g2 and Mistress Elsha… those two lines were my favorite as well.

Oh, and I’m trying to think of what Evelyn might do…