The Real Hurt

by Note In a Broken Bottle

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I look into your beautiful deep brown eyes and see you looking right back at me. You are listening to every word I say as if the future of the world depends on you listening to my pointless rambling. You gently stroke my hand sending soft tingles up my arm. As I tell you about how I hate my laugh you reply “Your laugh is what I love about you” in your deep voice. I love the time I spend in your powerful arms; you make me feel like the most beautiful girl in the world. I feel so safe here in your embrace and find it absolutely sexy that you are so strong that you could crush me in an instant but instead you hold me softly but firmly, like you will never hurt me and will never let go. So perfect. I feel so safe here encased by your sculpted biceps. I want so badly to kiss you right now but i can’t because I remember you belong to that other girl, the one you call your girlfriend. So strong yet you will never hurt me, oh wait you have. You stole my heart, the only real hurt that can be caused in this world.

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Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

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    Storykeeper of Fae's Buddy Icon Storykeeper of Fae

    Posted about 1 year ago

    Love the last line.

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    SunEyedGirl's Buddy Icon SunEyedGirl

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Love it!!! I especially love this line “I feel so safe here in your embrace and find it absolutely sexy that you are so strong that you could crush me in an instant but instead you hold me softly but firmly, like you will never hurt me ” Awesome…

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    User 3583's Buddy Icon User 3583

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    i just loved it soooo much i mean like that is soo.. i don’t even have words for it… i love every line from it so badly. Congratulations, it was perfect.

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    Note In a Broken Bottle's Buddy Icon Note In a Broken Bottle

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    awwww thanks guys!!!

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    DreamGhost's Buddy Icon DreamGhost

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Wow! I really liked that. Its somthing that I can relate to and so decriptive too! Fabulous job.

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    beautiful's Buddy Icon beautiful

    Posted about 1 year ago

    i loved it.

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    Xela's Buddy Icon Xela

    Posted about 1 year ago

    Aww…the end was so sad…I’ve felt like that before..

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    starcrossed's Buddy Icon starcrossed

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    wonderfully descriptive

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    Ariel 's Buddy Icon Ariel

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Wow, I did not expect that ending. It is beautifully written and comes you captive.

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    Ariel 's Buddy Icon Ariel

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    keep* sorry

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    Ms Kit Kat 's Buddy Icon Ms Kit Kat

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    i really like it

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    Lindsay's Buddy Icon Lindsay

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    That’s really good. I like it. Keep writing =]

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    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    beautiful writing. tragic, but beautiful.

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    Alexa ♥'s Buddy Icon Alexa ♥

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    I like the stream-of-consciousness style, mixed with near-lyrical prose.

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