Van Mantra's Betrayal

by -LadyInRed-

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Van Mantra had showed himself. Not by the road, as people had expected, rather, he was seen by all walking in from the desert. He had the usual calm look about him, the usual confident demeanor that he conducted himself.Behind him, there were people that were when you saw them at first appeared as the most normal people you ever saw.As you looked them for a bit longer, they changed, changing their forms every second to be the exact copy of one of the people that were there.It was frightening to see something so unnatural happening right in front of their eyes. Van Mantra however, remained unphased, and the people followed his example.By now it was almost midnight, and Van Mantra had not said a word. Instead, the people saw a shooting star, that was heading right at them at an incredible speed.Everyone was looking at the sky, awaiting their demise.Van Mantra slipped away unnoticed, a little smile on his lips.As he looked on from far away, the comet did what was expected. As they say, curiousity killed the cat.

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Average Reader Rating: 4.0 stars out of 5

  1. Van Mantra's Betrayal

    -LadyInRed-'s Buddy Icon -LadyInRed-

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Yeah, I know the ending is a bit, well, uncreative, but other than that, what do you think?

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    Richard Peck's Buddy Icon Richard Peck

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    HAH !
    It is very obvious you and I saw the story in very different ways. I REALLY liked this though. This one was a little confusing in the middel, but i liked the last line. This is the first i have written in days, and i plan to continue my line of this story. GRRReat job!

  3. Van Mantra's Betrayal

    YodaOnCrack's Buddy Icon YodaOnCrack

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    This is pretty cool.

  4. Van Mantra's Betrayal

    blueyedwonder's Buddy Icon blueyedwonder

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    i really like this.

  5. Van Mantra's Betrayal

    -LadyInRed-'s Buddy Icon -LadyInRed-

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    thnx for the comments, but i have one question. Mr.Peck, why are you imitating Tony the Tiger (GRReat!) from the cereal, you know Frosted Flakes? (No offense, just a harmless joke)

  6. Van Mantra's Betrayal

    llamaluvsmenotu's Buddy Icon llamaluvsmenotu

    Posted about 1 year ago

    LlAmA wAz HeRe

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