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The House of the Bleeding Beater

Jeremy climbed the stairs, dried paint crackling under his feet. Turning on the landing, he saw the bedroom door, half open. As he climbed the last four stairs, he almost convinced himself he could hear the thump of a heart. He slid threw the door, and gasped as he saw, in the sliver of light from the broken window, a beating heart on the red stained wood floor.

He wanted to touch it, everything left his mind as the house seemed to pull his shaking hand toward the heart.

Jeremey snapped to reality, quickly noticing the warmth of the heart on his hand. He tried to pull away, but his palm stuck to the now wildly thumping heart, that like his hand, stuck to the floor. Fear was thrown upon him like a wet towel as he tugged away from the floor. The heart was now throbbing in his hand, and blood squirted between his fingers.

With his body unseen, and his cries unheard by the detectives in search of the missing boy, Jeremey starved to death in the house. The invisable body still clutching the beating heart.

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The House of the Bleeding Beater
Richard Peck
Posted about 1 year ago

I had to take out the reason he went in, because this is 1024 letters, but I hope you will put that together for yourself, even if by writing a prequel. Just think of the cliche “Kid in a haunted house” opening.
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[pens&feathers]
Posted about 1 year ago

Riveting! I loved the line “fear was thrown upon him like a wet towel.” That is such a wonderful and original way to describe it.
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//miss mia//
Posted about 1 year ago

lol. i loved it. it made sense to me too. i thought of several reasons of why he would have went into the mansion or whatever it is called, but i don’t know the real reason why he went in there. lol. there is so many possibilities.
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MissJonas1492
Posted about 1 year ago

spooky spooky stuff
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horrorfan13
Posted about 1 year ago

This is good. It moved a little fast for me, but some prequels and sequels will help.
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Amarantine
Posted about 1 year ago

oooo, very Edgar Allan Poe-esque! I love it…the fast pace works, it definitely holds interest. =] !