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The Time Keeper

“Okay son, here’s the deal. We’re going to tie you to the hood of the car and you’re going to look for daddy’s watch.”

The boy looked up at his father, mouth open and eyes wide like a fish. He struggled with whether or not his father was joking or if he was truly contemplating making his son into an impromptu hood ornament. This question was answered when his father went around to the trunk and dug out a pair of bungee cords, brandishing them with glee and smiling encouragingly at his flabbergasted son.

“Daddy, I don’t think Mommy will like this,” he attempted, hoping this diversion would dim the maniacal glint in his father’s eyes.

“Well, your mommy doesn’t really like anything, so one more item on the list is not going to break the Gorgon’s back, so to speak,” the father informed him while hoisting the little boy on to the hood. “Besides, Daddy’s watch is very, very important,” he finished, patting his now strapped-in son on the head and running over to the driver’s seat of the car.

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Stovohobo
Posted about 1 year ago

Haha, this is maniacally funny. I can just imagine the dad’s tone.
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MissJonas1492
Posted about 1 year ago

crazy people
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communitycheese
Posted about 1 year ago

That’s freaking awesome.
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THX 0477
Posted about 1 year ago

Hmm, but how will being tied to the hood help them find a watch? Very silly. I liked the Gorgon comment. There aren’t enough stories with Gorgons, I think.
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Batak Beatrix
Posted about 1 year ago

Well, if the kid looks down over the front of the car, he’ll “hypothetically” see it if they’re driving slowly enough over an area. There’s more to it…but 1024 characters only allows so much…
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YodaOnCrack
Posted about 1 year ago

What a great opener – I don’t know that I’ve ever read a ‘first sentence’ that made me want to read more. I think it’s especially challenging to be tied to the hood of a car and asked to help find a watch. Kinda like a cop asking a drunk driver to recite the alphabet backwards! The guy was screwed from the get-go. Excellent work!
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anono-mouse
Posted about 1 year ago

i like your stories. you are a very good writer. i agree with yoda. that was a very good opening sentence
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Alexa ♥
Posted about 1 year ago

Okay son, here’s the deal. We’re going to tie you to the hood of the car and you’re going to look for daddy’s watch
The kid would be better off wandering the forest, eating the gingerbread house from one of your other stories.
I have to rate it so low because of the image it created. Fictional children can’t get hurt, but still . . .