Hello Old Friend

by Richard Peck

The orange glow of the cigarette sparkled brightly in the dark of the bar as the alcohol stained breath pushed through. He sat in the corner on a wooden chair too small for his large sagging body, a smoke on his lips and a half-empty bottle slipping in his greasy finger tips. His XXL muscle shirt was crusted with the sweat of days before, and his jeans were covered in various food crumbs. From behind the counter, the bartender called over to the heap of the man in his best english.

“Leave please. Time of closing is now!”

He didn’t move. Afriad to anger the man, the bartender began to scrub the counter again.

The door quickly opened and a tall man wrapped in black cloth stode in, his eyes hidden behind black glasses. The bartender shouted.

“Wir sind geschlossen. Du musst gehen!”

Without breaking his stride, the intruder whipped out a black shotgun and blew off his shoulder. The gun then turned to the man in the corner as he spoke through the black cloth over his face.

“Hello old friend.”

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 3.0 stars out of 5

  1. Hello Old Friend

    blueyedwonder's Buddy Icon blueyedwonder

    Posted 10 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    i love your descriptions. really great. i would love to see a sequel!

  2. Hello Old Friend

    horrorfan13's Buddy Icon horrorfan13

    Posted 10 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Oooo. I like it. It sort of reminds me of The Gunslinger series by Stephen King! Keep it going!!

  3. Hello Old Friend

    Laine P. Grey's Buddy Icon Laine P. Grey

    Posted 10 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Nice. I’m assuming that’s German.

  4. Hello Old Friend

    Stovohobo's Buddy Icon Stovohobo

    Posted 10 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    You are getting better and better, my friend.

  5. Hello Old Friend

    Six Feet Under The Stars' Buddy Icon Six Feet Under The Stars

    Posted 10 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    wow…really suspenseful. I can’t wait to see what you do with this.

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