The End of Me

by Stovohobo

And when the world is in my hands,
And I can change who I am,
I take a look into the mirror
And realize what’s truly here.

I see my translucent gaze
Among the ultraviolet rays.
And I can see what’s going on,
And I can see what’s truly wrong.

There is something
I like to call
“Crystal clear.”

Something
That doesn’t change
Just appears.

What you don’t see
Will be the end of me,
The end of me.

What you don’t see
Will be the end of me,
The end of me.

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 5.0 stars out of 5

  1. The End of Me

    Stovohobo's Buddy Icon Stovohobo

    Posted about 1 year ago

    First “song.” Poo. Poo, poo, I say! poo!

  2. The End of Me

    blueyedwonder's Buddy Icon blueyedwonder

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    i like it…of course, it’s a little hard to get without a tune…i assume there is a tune if it is a song? anyway, i like it. you’re too hard on yourself.

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    Suburban Saint's Buddy Icon Suburban Saint

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    its halfway decent. the lines could use a bit of tweaking just to help with the flow but the ideas, and most of the lines, are really good.

  4. The End of Me

    Nouvelle Bardot's Buddy Icon Nouvelle Bardot

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    I actually liked it. It reminded me of Nick Drake’s album, Pink Moon. Really, it did. And if you’ve never heard it I suggest you go out and listen to it and come back and write more. Cheers!

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    Stovohobo's Buddy Icon Stovohobo

    Posted about 1 year ago

    blue-I know, I know. But other ficleteers post songs without tunes, so why can’t I? HA! Never thought of that, did you? =)
    Suburban-Couldnt agree with you more. Flow…blah.
    Nouvelle-Ok…Erm, I’ll try it, maybe. <: D

  6. The End of Me

    MissJonas1492's Buddy Icon MissJonas1492

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    haha i liked it a lot
    my songs usually suck so i mostly stick to poems
    but u should keep up with the songs

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    Brebelles' Buddy Icon Brebelles

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    All my songs have tunes. And when I see other peoples songs, I sing them how I would think they’d be sung. Note me for tips or tweaking.

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