Tying My Shoes

by blueyedwonder

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I turned 20 years old yesterday. I was really excited. “Now you’re a big girl,” Daddy said to me. I got to play in the park and watch a big yellow school bus drive by. Some of the people on it said things to me that I didn’t understand. Daddy looked mad, but I didn’t know why. I told him I loved him. That made him happy.
I learned how to tie my shoes today. I was excited, but Momma looked sad when I did. I didn’t really know why. I thought she should be happy I learned how to tie my shoes. I gave her a big hug and told her I loved her. Then she made cookies for me and let me eat the dough.
Then I went outside to play on the sidewalk. Mostly though, I kept tying my shoes to make sure I could still do it. I didn’t really understand how it stayed together.
Usually I play alone, but today there was a little girl who was trying to tie her shoes.
“Hi,” I said, because Momma always taught me to be nice. “I can tie your shoes.”
She started to cry and ran for her house.
“I can tie my shoes,” I said to the empty air.

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  1. Tying My Shoes

    insanity's Buddy Icon insanity

    Posted 12 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    this is very good, does she suffer from mental retardation? it gives a good representation of the bittersweet innocence that reminded me of “to kill a mockingbird” or the beginning of “flowers for algernon”.

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    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 12 months ago

    Very sad and poignant.

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    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 12 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    very sweet story, kinda sad, well written.

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    SocccerISmyLIFE's Buddy Icon SocccerISmyLIFE

    Posted 12 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    This is sad btu, I understand it. It makes me feel kinda bad too. I like it though.

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    Mycroft's Buddy Icon Mycroft

    Posted 11 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Lovely descriptions – it feels like you’ve got right into how it would feel to have the kind of difficulties this girl has. That last line is perfect, too, with just a hint of sadness behind it. Great work.

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    Amaryllis' Buddy Icon Amaryllis

    Posted 11 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    =( That made me feel sad. But because it did, that means you did a great job with characterizing the way she perceives her surroundings.

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    Snarky's Buddy Icon Snarky

    Posted 11 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    I like it.

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