Ficlets

The Gift

Garret McClean arrived at the crime scene just before midnight, numb to the grisly scene sprawled before him. A man was dead, reportedly for being in the wrong place at the wrong time. Garret’s gut told him there was more to the crime, and when you have a gut like Garret’s, you listen.

“Felton Noble” said the voice as Garret pulled out his notebook, his memory not what it used to be. “What else you got?” mumbled Garret to himself. As always, the voice refused to answer.

For as long as he could remember, Garret has had “the gift”. He would’ve rather been able to hit a 95 mile per hour fastball, or run a four minute mile, but Garret was never very good at sports. Instead, Garret had always been able to answer the question “whodunit?”. This was the easy part. Getting his premonition to stick in court had always been the problem.

Garret pulled out his cell phone and pressed one. “I’m sure she’s still up”, Garret thought.

“Stacy? Garret here. Find out what you can about a Felton Noble.”

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Nathaniel Payne
Posted about 1 year ago

Gordon Freeman? Is this some Half-Life fan fiction? Change the name and I’m right there with you. =D
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StrugglingWriter
Posted about 1 year ago

Nathaniel – I will change the name. I’m not really into Half-Life, just picked a name. I will use a name generator and see what that comes up with. I generally don’t spend much time on character names.
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Kiara Crane
Posted about 1 year ago

I like your feel for mystery. It’s very readable.
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Nathaniel Payne
Posted about 1 year ago

Phenomenal. =D
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Susan Holder is terrific
Posted about 1 year ago

I like this. I don’t think I have heard of a story line like this.
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StrugglingWriter
Posted about 1 year ago

Thanks everyone for the comments.

“I don’t think I have heard of a story line like this.” – thanks Susan, that is a real complement
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Tygertrot
Posted about 1 year ago

The first ficlet I’ve read that looks worthy to be in print. I love the idea of a detective with an impeccable hunch. StrugglingWriter, in my mind you’re already a success. Keep writing – I’ll be watching for more!
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StrugglingWriter
Posted about 1 year ago

Tygertrot – what a nice thing to say. I’m glad you enjoyed reading this one. Your words inspire me to write more.
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Mystiquee
Posted about 1 year ago

I like the gift idea. The beginning is a bit ordinary. Perhaps talking about the gift in a flashback first somehow, then the murder. The gift is the point. Would love to read more.
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Saint Chuck
Posted about 1 year ago

This is good, very intriguing.
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SKermitgorf
Posted 12 months ago

I love the detective genre, your among the best at it in ficlets. It reminds me in style of Ross MacDonald, with a supernatural-”the gift’ twist.
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StrugglingWriter
Posted 11 months ago

Thanks Kermitgorf. I’m glad you liked it.