The experience

by Lindsay

I was everything but at the same time nothing. I couldnt think i could just wait, wait for some one to come and hurt me, or help me. I had this over whelming feeling of being released and all of the sudden i thought about Sam where the hell did he get off to now?
“Jesus Sam where are you! Jesus Sam lets go i gotta get you home!”
i was half expecting to hear his voice yelling Over here! but alas no all i heard was a whining sound…then the emerald colored light got brighter, no it got darker and then it dissapated. After that i couldnt see, it was like i knew someone was there standing with me. I could feel its presence next to me but i can’t seem to remember what he said. I think he said “Dont go.”But sometimes maybe it was Dont owe? Then all of the sudden i heard a thud….

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 3.0 stars out of 5

  1. The experience

    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted about 1 year ago

    3.0 out of 5 stars

    sorta leaves me wondering what happened, I hope you sequel it.

  2. The experience

    YodaOnCrack's Buddy Icon YodaOnCrack

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    A solid effort, and I agree with Kermitgorf – suspenseful… Fix the spelling and this will read even better…

  3. The experience

    Alexa ♥'s Buddy Icon Alexa ♥

    Posted about 1 year ago

    2.0 out of 5 stars

    I’m with Yoda on this. If you revise, let me know, but the grammar made it difficult.

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