Baby Smiley-Sun and the Nazi (a retelling)

by Fyora Cartagan

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A small toddler cried as he sat atop a large piece of concrete rubble in the middle of a desecrated city.

Obergefreiter Fredericks emerged from the hidden bunker beneath the city, to hear the ear-splitting sound of the boy’s cries. He located the boy quickly, and as soon as the young toddler saw Fredericks’ helmet, he stopped crying and smiled.

The soldier couldn’t help but smile back.
“What’s your name, little boy?” asked Fredericks.

“Smiley-sun!” responded the boy excitedly.

“Very fitting,” said Fredericks as he took the boy’s hand and led him down into the city’s underground as the Air Strike alarm resumed its shrill howl.

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Average Reader Rating: 4.0 stars out of 5

  1. Baby Smiley-Sun and the Nazi (a retelling)

    Alexa ♥'s Buddy Icon Alexa ♥

    Posted 12 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Much better than the original.
    It’s interesting how you ‘humanized’ the Nazi by having him care about a strange toddler.

  2. Baby Smiley-Sun and the Nazi (a retelling)

    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted 12 months ago

    Always difficult to humanize a Nazi, I always say.

  3. Baby Smiley-Sun and the Nazi (a retelling)

    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted 12 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Ok same charatcers, much better, considering what you had to work with. thats how you tell a story wtg Fyroa

  4. Baby Smiley-Sun and the Nazi (a retelling)

    blueyedwonder's Buddy Icon blueyedwonder

    Posted 11 months ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    this was very nice…pardon me for being rude, but it is much better than the original.

  5. Baby Smiley-Sun and the Nazi (a retelling)

    Spring Chicken's Buddy Icon Spring Chicken

    Posted 11 months ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    I didn’t understand the original at all but this version is very good.

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