The Best-Laid Plans

by Mycroft

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There is one other difference between snakes and serpents. You’d never know it just by looking at them, but serpents have a much greater lineage – right back to the creation of the world, in fact…

The serpent, its long muscular body winding through the leaves, slid towards the young woman as she knelt in the garden, its mind on one thing only – causing trouble. It didn’t really know why, nor did it want to know. But it did have a plan, and as it slithered up to the woman, it reared its head back, and breathed out the words it had been cooking up in its reptilian mind.

“Did God really say, ‘You must not eat from any tree in the garden?’”

The serpent was very proud of that one. The question carefully twisted the original, real instructions, and at the same time left an opening for further misdirection. A perfect opener.

The young woman stared at the serpent for what felt like an eternity. Then she jumped to her feet and backed away rapidly.

“Gah! A talking snake!”

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  1. The Best-Laid Plans

    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    Really good ficlet, loved the last line. Good biblical story

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    Fyora Cartagan's Buddy Icon Fyora Cartagan

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    That’s hilarious. I like how you worked in the biblical story.
    I had intended to continue it, and I may still be able to, but I would/will go with more of a pagan/medieval era story, I think.
    I wouldn’t be able to do the Biblical one, myself, so kudos to you.

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    Yeah Write!'s Buddy Icon Yeah Write!

    Posted about 1 year ago

    5.0 out of 5 stars

    haha! a twist on a classic story! i could totally see myself doing that!

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