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No Place in Perfection

When the teacher asked a question, her smooth, milky complexioned hand was always up first.

She always gave the answer without hesitating. It was always right.

To be brief: she was the teacher’s pet. You know, the girl that brings the teacher an apple.

But she was also beautiful, friendly, popular, perfect. Who deserved all of that perfection?

I hated her.

I wanted her.

God, looking at her lips (tomato red) I felt the urge to kiss them. Looking at her shiny, golden-grain hair I wanted to run my hands through it.

I wondered how she deserved that perfection every day. In between wondering if she would ever notice me, if she could possibly feel the same way I did.

The answer, of course, would be a no. She was happy with ‘amazingly hot’ beefy jock of a boyfriend.The perfect couple.

But still, I (sitting in the back corner of the classroom chewing gum, not ugly, not overly attractive, single, basically unnoticeable)couldn’t help but wonder.

Every single day.

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Yeah Write!
Posted about 1 year ago

great! this is exactly what i’m talking about!
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Officially
Posted about 1 year ago

Not overtly dramatic. Not my best, I don’t think. But it’s got the conflicting emotions, the unrequited love…And let me tell you: it is hard to fit a meat into a tragic love story!
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SKermitgorf
Posted about 1 year ago

beefy worked fine haha.I liked how you worked all the foods in, milky lips..and the apple being the only one refrencing actual food in the story. the others described things not being food in the story, so very well done.
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Stovohobo
Posted about 1 year ago

I loved how you put the words in, and “beefy” especially. When you think of it in food terms, that’s kinda funny. =)
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blueyedwonder
Posted about 1 year ago

hahaha. beefy. yes, that would be difficult. nice job.
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xtremepoison
Posted about 1 year ago

hahaha beefy
anyways would luv to see a sequel!!!
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Officially
Posted about 1 year ago

Is it really allowed to write a sequel for a challenge started ficlet? I wasn’t really thinking about it…hm. Maybe.
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THX 0477
Posted about 1 year ago

Excellent use of Petrarchan Conceits. Sorry, just finished a challenge on obscure literary terminology. I gotta’ dock you points though for not setting it at lunch.
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Alexa ♥
Posted about 1 year ago

Great angst.
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One Time, One Chance
Posted about 1 year ago

nice job – i couldn’t find a way to put beefy in a love story either, though u did a pretty good job of it =]