Carried Away

by Yeah Write!

“It was December 27, 1992. I was six years old. I had gotten up early, earlier than anyone else, to bring Raz, my golden retriever, his presents (it was his birthday). I had to be very quiet to avoid waking my three older brothers, who would have beat me up if I had. I tiptoed down the stairs, which creaked if a person so much as flinched. Anyway, I went out through the back door so as to avoid passing my parents’ room. I had, of course, forgotten about the screechy screen door in the back. When I made it outside, I walked toward the puppy’s house, a hand-built, red dog house with ‘Raz’ painted in white. As I neared the dog, he began to bark and jump for my attention. This is… this is when the terror begins,” I sniffled, attemting to hold back my tears, “As R-Raz was jumping, s-some horrible, beastly m-menace with spikes in its back and huge, r-red, glowing eyes swooped down and g-grabbed poor Raz in his wicked, thorny claws!”

“Yes’m. This is Officer Ortiz calling in a confirmed Chupacabra sighting.”

Comments

Average Reader Rating: 4.0 stars out of 5

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    SKermitgorf's Buddy Icon SKermitgorf

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    aaaaa the Chupacabra, poor Raz

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    N555champ /\and/\ X-Ninja (LoA)'s Buddy Icon N555champ /\and/\ X-Ninja (LoA)

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    Chupacabra is a fun word

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    THX 0477's Buddy Icon THX 0477

    Posted about 1 year ago

    Chupacabra is a fun word, but not good for a ficlet…too many letters.

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    Yeah Write!'s Buddy Icon Yeah Write!

    Posted about 1 year ago

    i agree, way too many letters. that’s why it’s good that i only used it once! yay!

  5. Carried Away

    blueyedwonder's Buddy Icon blueyedwonder

    Posted about 1 year ago

    4.0 out of 5 stars

    awwww noo!! poor raz!!!! thats sad :( still, interesting tragedy-turned-mystery at the end.

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    Flute Loop<33's Buddy Icon Flute Loop<33

    Posted about 1 month ago

    awww poor raz!

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