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When You Gaze Into the Abyss

Peering out the patio into the night, my eyes darted back and forth, looking for movement. There was something out there, had been out there for the past three nights. The feeling of being imprisoned within the confines of my own home had been growing, fear rising with the knowledge that I was slowly being hunted.

Worse was that every time I stepped outside, the air was laced with a malevolent heaviness that stifled me. There was no singing of birds, no humming of insects. Every instinct told me to flee, but I knew that for some reason, I had to stay.

So I called my brother, a priest at a local parish. He had agreed to come over to rest my fears. When a knock rang out, I ran to the front window, relief flooding me at the sight of him. Quickly unchaining the lock, I opened the door. “Brad, thank God.”

He looked at me, and my blood ran cold. His eyes were dead, lifeless, black as a starless night. My knees buckled as a cruel smile curled his lips.

“Whatever gave you the impression that I was Brad?”

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When You Gaze Into the Abyss
SKermitgorf
Posted 11 months ago

yikes. great 1st entry into Yodas’ halloween Horror contest, youve set the bar high.
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communitycheese
Posted 11 months ago

Eek! Nicely done.
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THX 0477
Posted 11 months ago

Oh no, a doppleganger priest! Tough first entry to follow.
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Yeah Write!
Posted 11 months ago

now whatever i write will look bad… thanks alot! in case you can’t tell from the jealousy, I loved it!
When You Gaze Into the Abyss
Saint Chuck
Posted 11 months ago

Shudder* Nice work, I definetly got the chills.
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blueyedwonder
Posted 11 months ago

eeka eeka! doppelganger indeed! and lovely descriptive language, by the way.
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Batak Beatrix
Posted 11 months ago

Just for the record….”Brad” is not a vampire.
When You Gaze Into the Abyss
YodaOnCrack
Posted 11 months ago

Great opening – a terrific first sequel. I’ve been out of town so this is the first one I’ve read…
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THX 0477
Posted 11 months ago

Woohoo, congrats on getting onto the ‘Most Active’ List.
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Fuchsia Deviant
Posted 11 months ago

Wow…that’s creepy. Excellent.
When You Gaze Into the Abyss
Shadow
Posted 11 months ago

Scary. Great job :)
When You Gaze Into the Abyss
YodaOnCrack
Posted 11 months ago

Ooooh – looks like you got a leg up on the competition…. This really is very well done. The others are too, but this one is standing out. We’ll see what happens. Oh, the suspense of it all…......... Better than reality T.V., eh?
When You Gaze Into the Abyss
Amaster
Posted 10 months ago

I’m glad I didn’t read this before entering. If I did, I would be completely discouraged. It is just to good.
When You Gaze Into the Abyss
Dr. Lew
Posted 10 months ago

HOLY —
that was meant to be a “good job”
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cainegreene
Posted 10 months ago

I liked this a lot but I liked your sequel even more way to go!!!
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Batak Beatrix
Posted 10 months ago

I admit I prefer the sequel myself. But eh, I needed the background info.