Excellent writing. Well balanced descriptions. My head became a battleground for the thunderous thuds that the droplets made as they fell upon the skylight.—my favorite line. It gives more than just a sense of sound, it also gives a glimpse of the miniature world that that sound creates, in the mind.

Amazing writing. The choice of music was fitting as well. My daughter is learning that piece right now so it’s been drifting around my house for a while. This is a really beautiful glimpse of grief.

Incredibly well written. It draws you in entirely and just creates the picture in the your mind. Beautiful.

I like the little touch of levity in the middle of the heaviness of it all. Gives it a nice balance before the heartbreaking ending…not that I was expecting a happy ending on this one.
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The reality of the situation. felt real.
comic relife to break the tension.. could hear the sounds and see the rain in my mind, worthy of being featured.
1st ive read of your stories.. look forward to reading more.
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It’s really an amazing piece. It draws you in and keeps you there. I can feel it. The lightly humorous middle gives me the feeling of a last attempt to stop from breaking down entirely, a “final barrier”, if you will.

I see the scene as a dark greyscale. It happens with me, I get a color from a piece of writing. I’m wondering if this happens with anyone else?