add quotations, please, to make it easier to understand what’s going on.

There are some great ideas and images in this ficlet. I agree with blueyedwonder that it would likely read better if edited for formatting – but a great entry for this… Nice work.

Is this better?

“Your nuts Kay said, go back to sleep. put quotes around nuts” and “go
Change ideal to idea.
good edge of your seat ficlet. intense. good ending.

I like it!!!

Spooky!! Good writing. Get ready for halloween!!

I love it