If you write it in past tense, it sounds a lot better.

Good story – enjoyed this one. There are some great ones for the competition.

Shadow—you’re right, it does. I changed it. Thanks.

i really like this one

it sets up the next story – like that someone will find Kiarra in the painting

i love the ending but if you have anymore characters left – i think you should finish with a repeat of the Lillia Kendal, 1854. bit but with Kiarra’s name

only a thought

and add the t on thought in the last line of the first para and it’s a five star story

Dang, I forgot the t…but I fixed it. And I don’t have anymore characters but I will see if I can try to fit that in…thanks!

yeah

nice ending i like it!
im upgrading you to five stars now for the spelling fix lol

Excellent. Loved the end was wondering how you were going to scare us. Stuck in a painting forever!

I like it. I would love if her father found her there in the painting, smiling that strange smile.