I like it. A bit simplistic, or maybe I’m in a pissy mood. I’ll rate it another day perhaps.

Nooo Not Leda… thts tragic.. the writing was gripping well done! The use of italics enhanced the story.

I’m not big on the Greek myths but liked the whole piece ficlet to ficlet. Question is Leda a goddess or a Landowner? Was unsure why Demeter was thinking of Leda, praying to her or worrying she would come down hard on him. Not that it matters she is dead but can’t cross the river Styx, yes?

no, no…sorry, should probably revise this…but acantheus loves leda, and since acantheus is a landowner, the god(dess) he respects most is demeter, goddess of the grain.

Honestly, this reads a bit awkward but there is something here I like. Do not ever say “sorry” for what you’ve written though… I just think the descriptions need work. Instead of adjectives, try using metaphors and similes. (i.e. – instead of their was a cut in her heart, how about her heart bled like milk spills from an open bottle) – these are tried and true description techniques. Again, I really like this – just trying to help with your descriptions.

mmk thx. :]