one teeny tiny slight plot error…..is this the night after the party?!

its actually scientifically impossible that they would know she is pregant mere hours after the rape
it would take at least a week or maybe a few days but it would be impossible to know straight off
maybe you should make it that she has been a hospital for sometime before the start – like she was in a coma or something i dunno then they would know if shes pregnant

just a tip

i like this btw

ok thank you! i’m just gonna pretend like i knew that and just didn’t make it clear! ATTENTION ! this story begins a few nights after the party! she was in a coma the whole time!

actually i really did know that but i forgot to take it into account while writing this story. (inner demons are insulting me repeatedly for my stupidity)

Such a downer when the inner demons get on the insulting bandwagon. I’m guessing that by the time I read this you’d edited in the bit about things not adding up and the intern’s expression and stuff. Although I’m disappointed I missed an opportunity to expound on medical stuff, as artistsrunwild beat me to it.

expound away! i don’t mind, especially since i’m sure you have more knowledge than i do (i’m pretty sure a rock has more knowledge than i do but that’s beside the point)

WOO HOO !
it makes SOO much more sense now…
AND it gives you and extra layer to develop
and sorry to beat you too it THX but im a fan of raining on people’s parades….so i had to :P

and Yeah Write I laughe everytime I read your profile…its gone from im a freshman to im not a 12 yr old regardless of how i write to im not a NINE year old

lol
and dont stress…you dont write like your 9 or 12 at all :)

ah yes but it seems I DO

i mean an extra
and laugh
AND you’re

tsk tsk to myself

Oh my goodness. I guess I saw that coming, that she was raped, but still. It’s always so sad when something like that happens.

eww, i can’t think about being raped and pregent with some sick twisted person’s baby.