Gosh, this really makes me wonder what was happening…

That is amazing imagery…

And why did he die?

And what happened to Ben?

I sequeled.

Hope you don’t mind!

Your story and John Perkin’s challenge inspired me!

This is very cool. No wonder it inspired OrangeOreos to write a sequel. I loved the line about Ben’s eyes searching your face before they closed forever. Well done.

Fantastic imagery. It also made me very sad… that shows a great ficlet, when it affects the reader’s emotions.
Five stars!

yeah, fantastic imagery!

Beautifully described. Very sudden turn into the fantastic/fantasy at the end there.