Good, though I would consider rewording the line: “There really is no escape, no returning.” Also, the last two lines, with the exception of “only tears,” sounds a bit repetitious. This slows down the pace of your narrative, which is otherwise quite well-paced. I look forward to the sequel.

Sadly, no sequel likely here. That’s as far as I imagined the story, unless someone else sequels, which doesn’t happen all that often.