Comments on The Archer Leaves (Lyric Challenge) by Amaster

Amaster

The lyric I used was “I am not afraid to keep on livin’, I am not afraid to walk this world alone.â? from the song Famous Last Words, by My Chemical Romance.
- Posted 2009-01-12 02:54:00.
♠Ana Cristina♥

It’s good, Amaster, but I think your piece will flow better if you space out the paragraphs. Aesthetically, it looks cramped and that stilts the flow of your narrative. Try it if you’re not past the character limit.
- Posted 2009-01-12 02:54:00.
Amaster

There you go, I think that is what you had in mind.
- Posted 2009-01-12 02:54:00.
♠Ana Cristina♥

Yep. Much better! :-)
- Posted 2009-01-12 02:54:00.
One Time, One Chance

oOo, i likeee thiss! but he’s not allowed to leave! stay w/ her!
- Posted 2009-01-12 02:54:00.
Amaster

Since people seem to think that this is a good ficlet, I’m going to seriously consider sequeling it.
- Posted 2009-01-12 02:54:00.
Mask By The Moon

O.o SO THAT ’S WHERE LYRA RAN OFF TO !
- Posted 2009-01-12 02:54:00.
artistsrunwild

YEAH FOR MY CHEMICAL ROMANCE !

and a really good use of the lyric
i’m about to read the sequel
- Posted 2009-01-12 02:54:00.
Amaster

MTBM : What do you mean that’s where Lyra ran off to?
- Posted 2009-01-12 02:54:00.