this was my most memrable nightmares – yes, i actually had this dream when i was 6. what caused me to have this dream is beyond me, but it happened, and i was.. scared. reallly scared. =[

awww.. thats sad. I would be scared too.

So, at six you already understood the perils of getting into debt with a ruthless loan shark. Good for you! Seriously, though, that is a scary dream.

scAry…

wow. this is really the only word i can think of. nice job.

remembering what was said in a dream, thats amazing. well written, suspenseful, no wonder you were scared, your secuirtiy was in jeopardy, all your things taken away—symbolisim there.

I read it and really liked it, and then I read the comments; only then did my heart start beating faster. It took a little time for the suspense to catch up with me, which is what happens in real life, yet is difficult to portray in written work.
Good Job!