I like it! Very eerie. More specifics might be nice… how exactly is the fog “spooky?” And what is so “strange” about the noise? Try some metaphors, good descriptions always give an extra dimension to stories. :-)

k…thnx for the advice. I’ll try that next time.

A neat scenario, to be sure. My niche is dialog, so that’s what I notice. Slang or a particular way of talking can go a long way towards establishing characters—just a thought for the future. Hope you keep writing!

Ok…thnx for the advice. I’ll try that as well.

I agree with uselessness.