I liked the imagery. Simply brilliant.

Excellent. In your first paragraph, where you describe the young man dismount from his horse, you write “a young” and do not write the word man. If you don’t have enough character space, consider writing “a youth,” or simply “a boy/man,” that way it’s still gramatically correct.

Noted and edited. Thanks.

This is based on the poem “Willkommen und Abschied” by Johann Goethe, written in 1793.

Very romantic.