very jarring, I can undertsnad the fear of deep water. premonition maybe to avoid deep water.

ugh! scary!
but i’m a swimmer so i wouldn’t understand…
in fact, when i swim i feel hopeless when i can’t go deep enouph to hide from that glimmer

The water held me back, engulfing me in a fearful hug that would never end. < BEST LINE !
hugs make the world go round, but not in this case – nice job =]

i like the way you weaved your fears into it. and your wording was very original. nice work.