You hear a sound that makes your blood run cold. You may be lost, but They are not. < Best Parantence [paragraph/few sentences]!!!
i lovee this series!

yeah I know i was reading them and I was like…I must write a sequal! Hopefully it helps the story along and doesn’t hinder it.

nah man, he wasnt a coward. you thought he was, you thought he ran off, but he ran into the same problems as this guy did. then he died saving you. he was brave, man. but i think, at least, you realized youd rather be lost than dead.

great story so far but why is he clutching a lifeless hand?

“That doesn’t make up for the fact that your lost”…

Try “you’re”.

You have some spelling/grammatical issues, and second person is clunky for anything. Try third person. Or, if you’re looking for that in-body experience, try first person.

grammar is kinda confusing… i think some proof-reading would solve the problem.

This was very cool, but a bit confusing. Maybe some re-writing is in order.

yeah…. when i wrote this, the story before mine was in second person. I was adding onto that. Guess they changed it.

Alriight attempted to make it first person,not sure if it worked though. If any one could help edit?