“Spray-On Pants” – Kisschasy [A highly recommended Aussie Band]

sounds like a sight to be seen…
A skinny girl in too-tight jeans stumbled over to him and stuck her tongue down his throat. He humoured her for a while until she realised he was someone else. Horrified, he left her to gyrate to the music and sought shelter in the lounge area of the club. It was a sight to be seen. that whole paragraph is awesome!

I agree, that one paragraph makes the story.

Love the ending!!!!!!!! ♥♥

oh im SOO glad that middle paragraph worked out….I edited it upwards of 4 times to make it just right and im glad it paid off! :)
thank you everyone

He wanted to be a struggling artist who did anything for their creative lifestyle. He wanted to live for something, not just cigarettes and bad beer.
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hehe, interestingly stated. i dont know about everybody else, but struggling writers have a habit of picking up drug addictions or suffering complete mental or emotional breakdowns. Cigs and bad beer tend to be a mainstay in the lives of us never-will-be’s. This guy’s got a rough path ahead of him. Good little ficlet, again.

It was pretty much guaranteed that I was going to love this as soon as I saw the title…also, it’s written very well. It gets the bleakness of this guy’s life across very well without ever stating it openly – great example of “show, don’t tell”.

This is great! I love how you use song lyrics for these.