Heh heh. That’s just cute. (I would suggest, though, separating your paragraphs with a blank line so they’re easier to read.)

I sacrificed some words, added the breaks, and fixed a continuity glitch. There.

Very nice story. I like it a lot. That is the catch with the space separating paragraphs, that counts as a character against you.

hehe so true to life :)

S.J.