If we sleep another night on pillows made of shame, will the morrow shine the same? I really like that line. ~ I think separating the paragraphs would help immensely.
this is okay. It really doesn’t fit with the characters I’ve been creating though…did you read the whole series? They don’t really have that make history…they’ve only just met… so I won’t be continuing this ficlet, I’ll sequel mine, but thanks for liking mine enough to sequel it
cheers. well, i read 3 of your previous. and no i made it all up – no lyrics. but i just felt like it was all so intense b4, i needed to get ryhming. i’ll b honest i’m not good with intimacy on paper. you are, that’s a hot trait.
its alright…but still this wasnt a bad job as a stand alone ficlet as it doesnt really connect as you noticed lol
the poetry is really very nice though and the lines they say…i think you should try again with your own story/stand alone with this rhyming poetry structure…i like it
Alexa ♥
artistsrunwild
artistsrunwild
gowziproductions
gowziproductions
artistsrunwild