Fantastic! I’d have left off the last sentence, though. Nice piece of writing.

Very nice! I like this a lot.

Mysterious and intriguing. I agree that it would sound better without the last line. That’s the only suggestion I have! Excellent.

Nope, the last line was great, and was the reason I felt satisfaction for reading your story. Everyone expects him to fall, but he flew and that means there’s more story to be told and both characters are now much more interesting. If he falls thats it, game over, thanks for reading… boooring. You did the right thing.