It is good in the beginning….then it seems clamped together at the end.

Over-all its very good!

Wow, disturbing. And have to agree with Pisces, which I can’t believe I’m doing cause I’m a Taurus (really, I have no idea how those two signs are supposed to interact). I thought it was a really neat idea though; I think you just got hit by that character limit.

Yeah, those character limits always get me =p

This strikes me a sixth sense sort of story, told from the point of view of two little girls who don’t know they’re ghosts.

I lack the vision to be able to write a sequel though. Perhaps I’ll give it some thought and see if any inspiration rolls out.

Great entry though.

Oh no, I intended it to be that the mother killed the father and blood got on the gifts he bought them. But that is an AWESOME idea! I hope you get some inspiration to continue =]