haha, sorry this is reallllllllly bad

ding fries are done Funny ending.. Family Guy Fan!

I wouldn’t call it bad. I’d call it in need of a little direction and editing. The story itself, catching a piece in time of an adolescent girl, is actually pretty good.

Some simple editing and this is a solid four star entry. We get just enough to give us some idea of who the girl is, but not so much that future ficleteers would be turned off writing a sequel or prequel simply because too much info is presented and they can’t fit in their own vision.

it was a little random, but hey i liked the falling thing, idid it in basketball practice once, it was the weirdest thing!creative

omg that video is really sad ; (

p.s. SupRspi – you talk too much…; )