Very interesting.

I don’t know what to think, but it interests me. I’ll have to read it again when I’m less tired, and see if it inspires me to do a sequel or prequel.

I like it. I think if you take it farther it could either amuse people or scare the crap out of them!
:)

Immortal, maybe?

i like this. it gave me something to think about and amused me quite a bit. take it a step farther?