Really interesting beginning and very lyrical. But it wound up a bit repetitive by the end and I kept hoping it would go somewhere. You have a nice way with words though.

I agree that this did have a lyrical sound to it, but I thought the whole thing turned out nicely. Great job :) I’d love to see some more of your work

I like the repetitive aspect, because it emphasizes the theme of the writing—wandering. Wandering can often be/seem aimless and repetitive. So can thoughts. So, their intersection here made sense to me.